考研英语待批改作文：

　　8-10分

　　第二篇

　　Dear Eleven，

　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your encouragement to me. If it had not been for your assistance in my Olympic Game in Maths. I fear that I would have been give it up early.

　　Every one agrees that it was you who encouraged me to persist on the game all the time and always helped me make a lot of preparations for the game, so I had the confidence in myself and won the game at last. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Eleven，

　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your encouragement to me. If it had not been for your assistance in my (加上study of)Olympic Game in Maths(奥数是Mathematic Olympiad ). I fear that I would have been give(改为giving) it up early.

　　Every one agrees that it was you who encouraged me to persist on the game all the time and always helped me make a lot of preparations for the game, so I had the confidence in myself and won the game at last. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　8分

　　同学你好，这篇小作文整体来讲写的不错。建议你如果遇到某些不确定但又不是非常重要的专有名词，可以改为其他有把握的词，例如本篇作文中提到的奥数，完全可以改为其他的比赛。

　　考研英语待批改作文：

　　8-10分

　　第二篇

　　Dear Eleven，

　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your encouragement to me. If it had not been for your assistance in my Olympic Game in Maths. I fear that I would have been give it up early.

　　Every one agrees that it was you who encouraged me to persist on the game all the time and always helped me make a lot of preparations for the game, so I had the confidence in myself and won the game at last. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Eleven，

　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your encouragement to me. If it had not been for your assistance in my (加上study of)Olympic Game in Maths(奥数是Mathematic Olympiad ). I fear that I would have been give(改为giving) it up early.

　　Every one agrees that it was you who encouraged me to persist on the game all the time and always helped me make a lot of preparations for the game, so I had the confidence in myself and won the game at last. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　8分

　　同学你好，这篇小作文整体来讲写的不错。建议你如果遇到某些不确定但又不是非常重要的专有名词，可以改为其他有把握的词，例如本篇作文中提到的奥数，完全可以改为其他的比赛。