I am a sandong University student and learning computer science four years.I am reding this message which your recruiting computer engineers from newspaper and I want to take part in your community .

　　Tank for you time And I would take to extend my greatest appreciation if you are so kind as to take my letter into your consideration.

　　Ling ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear(空格)Sir or Modam(拼写错误，Madam)(加逗号)

　　I am a sandong(Shandong) University student and learning(应该用完成时，I have learnt) computer science(加for) four years. I am reding(改成read，应该是读完才写信的) this message which your(改成youre) recruiting computer engineers from newspaper and I want to take part in your community. As a young man whose(改成I am，否则这不是一个完整的句子) interested in computer science and(加I) spend four years to learn it. And, last summer, I was worked into(改成worked in) a small company as a(应该用an)engineer. I belief(have belief或者是believe) this professinal(拼写错误professional)experience can help me adapt to your enterprise as a worker. You(应该用所有格your) corporation is one of the leader(前边是one of结构，这里应该用复数形式) of computer science. So I assure that working in your company I will must(去掉一个) be unforgetable(拼写错误，unforgettable是令人难忘的，你不能说是我将令人难忘的) throught(拼写错误through) my life. Tank(thanks) for you(your) time And(and，a小写) I would take to extend my greatest appreciation if you are so kind as to take my letter into your consideration. Ling ming(Yours sincerely，下一行LiMing，落款谓语右下角) 点评：4-5分主要问题是语法错误和拼写错误比较多。需要多背单词多积累词语的用法，同时需要学习一下句式方面的语法知识。

　　I am a sandong University student and learning computer science four years.I am reding this message which your recruiting computer engineers from newspaper and I want to take part in your community .

　　Tank for you time And I would take to extend my greatest appreciation if you are so kind as to take my letter into your consideration.

　　Ling ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear(空格)Sir or Modam(拼写错误，Madam)(加逗号)

　　I am a sandong(Shandong) University student and learning(应该用完成时，I have learnt) computer science(加for) four years. I am reding(改成read，应该是读完才写信的) this message which your(改成youre) recruiting computer engineers from newspaper and I want to take part in your community. As a young man whose(改成I am，否则这不是一个完整的句子) interested in computer science and(加I) spend four years to learn it. And, last summer, I was worked into(改成worked in) a small company as a(应该用an)engineer. I belief(have belief或者是believe) this professinal(拼写错误professional)experience can help me adapt to your enterprise as a worker. You(应该用所有格your) corporation is one of the leader(前边是one of结构，这里应该用复数形式) of computer science. So I assure that working in your company I will must(去掉一个) be unforgetable(拼写错误，unforgettable是令人难忘的，你不能说是我将令人难忘的) throught(拼写错误through) my life. Tank(thanks) for you(your) time And(and，a小写) I would take to extend my greatest appreciation if you are so kind as to take my letter into your consideration. Ling ming(Yours sincerely，下一行LiMing，落款谓语右下角) 点评：4-5分主要问题是语法错误和拼写错误比较多。需要多背单词多积累词语的用法，同时需要学习一下句式方面的语法知识。