一、句子之间缺少过渡性的单词或词组

　　① Salmons swim upstream, they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.

　　② Salmons swim upstream, and then they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.

　　二、省字号的滥用

　　① the governments plan

　　② the plan of the government

　　三、代词之间的性、数、格不一致

　　① Everyone has their homework.

　　② Everyone has his homework.

　　四、主句与从句的顺序不当

　　① Some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over, after the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds.

　　② After the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds, some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over.

　　五、双重否定

　　① Barely no one noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.

　　② Barely anyone noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.

　　六、修饰语、插入语的位置不当

　　① The forest fire, no longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters, jumped the firebreak.

　　② No longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters, the forest fire jumped the firebreak.

　　七、意义含糊的先行词

　　① The band members collected his and her uniforms.

　　② The band members collected their uniforms.

　　八、介词和冠词的滥用

　　① The project of the government reduces the costs of production of the private firms.

　　② The government project reduces the production costs of private firms.

　　九、句子缺少成分

　　① When aiming for the highest returns, and also thinking about the possible losses.

　　② When aiming for the highest returns, investors also should think about the possible losses.

　　十、忘记断句

　　① I do not recall what kind of printer it was all I remember is that it could sort, staple, and print a packet at the same time.

　　② I do not recall what kind of printer it was. All I remember is that it could sort, staple, and print a packet at the same time.

　　一、句子之间缺少过渡性的单词或词组

　　① Salmons swim upstream, they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.

　　② Salmons swim upstream, and then they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.

　　二、省字号的滥用

　　① the governments plan

　　② the plan of the government

　　三、代词之间的性、数、格不一致

　　① Everyone has their homework.

　　② Everyone has his homework.

　　四、主句与从句的顺序不当

　　① Some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over, after the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds.

　　② After the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds, some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over.

　　五、双重否定

　　① Barely no one noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.

　　② Barely anyone noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.

　　六、修饰语、插入语的位置不当

　　① The forest fire, no longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters, jumped the firebreak.

　　② No longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters, the forest fire jumped the firebreak.

　　七、意义含糊的先行词

　　① The band members collected his and her uniforms.

　　② The band members collected their uniforms.

　　八、介词和冠词的滥用

　　① The project of the government reduces the costs of production of the private firms.

　　② The government project reduces the production costs of private firms.

　　九、句子缺少成分

　　① When aiming for the highest returns, and also thinking about the possible losses.

　　② When aiming for the highest returns, investors also should think about the possible losses.

　　十、忘记断句

　　① I do not recall what kind of printer it was all I remember is that it could sort, staple, and print a packet at the same time.

　　② I do not recall what kind of printer it was. All I remember is that it could sort, staple, and print a packet at the same time.