考研英语待批改作文：

　　Dear Sir or Madam:

　　Your sincerely

　　Li Ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam: I have got the message from internet(i大写)which says your company needs a biologist. I wrote This(t小写)letter to ask would I have the opportunity to have this job. I have graduated from GZ(不建议使用缩写)University for two years, and I have got Yales P.D(不建议使用缩写) one month ago. All the above make me have the knowledge to cope this job. I worked as an experiment assistan My interest in the position of treasurer in your corporation has prompted me to forward to my resume for your review and consideration.

　　I am convinced that I am right person for the job in that the three point as follow. Firstly, I have the certified public accountant qualification certificate and the Bachelor degree. Secondly, I have relevant work experience and the qualifications necessary to effectively handle the responsibilities of financial accounting. Lastly, my industrial attitudes of professional, rigorous and innovative could make me complete the task better which the company distribute.

　　I express my devout appreciation to you for your prompt attention. I welcome the chance to meet you to further discuss my qualification and the requirement of your company. Look forward to your reply. Thank you again.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　My interest in the position of treasurer in your corporation has prompted me to forward to(forward作为动词讲时是及物动词，去掉to)my resume for your review and consideration. I am convinced that I am(加定冠词the)right person for the job in that the(去掉一个) three point(应该用复数，因为是三个)as follow. Firstly, I have the certified public accountant qualification certificate and the Bachelor degree. Secondly, I have relevant work experience and the qualifications(与上面的qualifications重复，如果有不同，应该区别说明) necessary to effectively handle the responsibilities of financial accounting. Lastly, my industrial attitudes of professional, rigorous and innovative(这里应该用名词) could make me complete the task better which the company distribute. I express my devout appreciation to you for your prompt attention. I welcome the chance to meet you to further discuss my qualification and the requirement of your company. Look forward to your reply. Thank you again. Yours sincerely, Li Ming 点评：6-7分第二段需要更加简洁明朗，即条理清晰的列出内容，同时句子要简洁。 t for two years,(加连词and) therefore I have the ability of use biological apparatus. If I am possible to get this job please contact me, my email address is XXX@yahoo.com. Thank you for your time. Your(Yours)sincerely(加逗号) Li Ming 点评：6-7分写的还可以的，注意一下大小写和信件的格式。考试和简历中为了表示诚意，不建议使用缩写。

　　考研英语待批改作文：

　　Dear Sir or Madam:

　　Your sincerely

　　Li Ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam: I have got the message from internet(i大写)which says your company needs a biologist. I wrote This(t小写)letter to ask would I have the opportunity to have this job. I have graduated from GZ(不建议使用缩写)University for two years, and I have got Yales P.D(不建议使用缩写) one month ago. All the above make me have the knowledge to cope this job. I worked as an experiment assistan My interest in the position of treasurer in your corporation has prompted me to forward to my resume for your review and consideration.

　　I am convinced that I am right person for the job in that the three point as follow. Firstly, I have the certified public accountant qualification certificate and the Bachelor degree. Secondly, I have relevant work experience and the qualifications necessary to effectively handle the responsibilities of financial accounting. Lastly, my industrial attitudes of professional, rigorous and innovative could make me complete the task better which the company distribute.

　　I express my devout appreciation to you for your prompt attention. I welcome the chance to meet you to further discuss my qualification and the requirement of your company. Look forward to your reply. Thank you again.

　　Yours sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英语作文批改点评如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　My interest in the position of treasurer in your corporation has prompted me to forward to(forward作为动词讲时是及物动词，去掉to)my resume for your review and consideration. I am convinced that I am(加定冠词the)right person for the job in that the(去掉一个) three point(应该用复数，因为是三个)as follow. Firstly, I have the certified public accountant qualification certificate and the Bachelor degree. Secondly, I have relevant work experience and the qualifications(与上面的qualifications重复，如果有不同，应该区别说明) necessary to effectively handle the responsibilities of financial accounting. Lastly, my industrial attitudes of professional, rigorous and innovative(这里应该用名词) could make me complete the task better which the company distribute. I express my devout appreciation to you for your prompt attention. I welcome the chance to meet you to further discuss my qualification and the requirement of your company. Look forward to your reply. Thank you again. Yours sincerely, Li Ming 点评：6-7分第二段需要更加简洁明朗，即条理清晰的列出内容，同时句子要简洁。 t for two years,(加连词and) therefore I have the ability of use biological apparatus. If I am possible to get this job please contact me, my email address is XXX@yahoo.com. Thank you for your time. Your(Yours)sincerely(加逗号) Li Ming 点评：6-7分写的还可以的，注意一下大小写和信件的格式。考试和简历中为了表示诚意，不建议使用缩写。